Script 3

I cannot seem to print screen so have published my script, heres the link

http://www.scriptbuddy.com/published/?p=4291535515

You will need a password to see it, and the password is asfilm

Second Attempt of script

Location report

My location should be in a restaurant, I took these photos in a harvester.

Script run-through

Relationship between characters:
Mine shows relationship quite well but I need a lot more dialogue between them to emphasise.

Moves the plot along:
Half way- I need a lot more detail with characters dialogue - esp to say why she doesn't want him.

Matches macro:
Yes because she shown being independent and strong and he is being reliant on her and is soppy.

Script believeable?
Yes - I think they would talk like this - feminine males

Improvement:
Need more dialogue and detail