Mine shows relationship quite well but I need a lot more dialogue between them to emphasise.
Moves the plot along:
Half way- I need a lot more detail with characters dialogue - esp to say why she doesn't want him.
Matches macro:
Yes because she shown being independent and strong and he is being reliant on her and is soppy.
Script believeable?
Yes - I think they would talk like this - feminine males
Improvement:
Need more dialogue and detail
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